Today I crashed landed on what I think is an island. I don't know how many people have survived, so far its just me. I just met up with a kid I don't know his name yet. we swam in the water and told each other stories about our life. He kept talking about his auntie I told him that my dad will save us. Then he tells me a story about how people called him piggy I broke out in laughter it was so funny. So since I found him their most be more survivors I grab a conshell and blow into in maters of minutes kids come out of the jungle. Then this one group comes out, their leader jack, they are called the choir boys. Me and him want to be the leader so we have to show the kids who is better for the leader postilion
Ralph
good job I think you did good speaking in first person as Ralph. I think you wrote about the important events in chapter 1 like when the plane crashed etc. You had good grammar and I did not see any mistakes in this post
ReplyDeleteyou did a good job of showing who you are which is ralph.
ReplyDeleteit reminded me of when ralph made the conch shell make a noise and every one come to the beach. the grammar mistake that you made was not capitalizing Jacks name
You did a good job with the voice of the character. I think that you were impersonating Jack? You made remember how Jack and Ralph met in chapter 1. I like the way you said how you and Ralph were trying to become the leader
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